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Genius
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 A rondel . . . well, that reminds me of why I shy away from using the traditional forms in poetry, why I prefer a free style verse, for reading and writing.
The rondel, like many traditional forms, has a strong rhyme scheme and it tends to distract from what the poet is actually saying.
The mind is so attuned to the rhyme, expecting it, it looks for that sound to kick in - misses the thought given.
They'll call it chance, or luck, or call it Fate --
The cards and stars that tumble as they will.
Tomorrow manifests and brings the bill
For every kiss and kill, the small and great.
You want to know the future, love? Then wait:
I'll answer your impatient questions. Still --
They'll call it chance, or luck, or call it Fate,
The cards and stars that tumble as they will.
Me, I'm not missing the message, because I'm aware of the rhyme scheme, so my mind doesn't need to track it.
And, I actually like the poem . . .
Who is the narrator? The poet? God? The devil? The goddess of fate?
Who is speaking . . .
It's well done, this rondel. A poem done in traditional form is well done, if the poet can hold the reader's interest with the words, allow the reader to forget the rhyming scheme, if the message is strong enough.
It is NOT a poem that says nothing, just carries words that rhyme and look good.
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